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154208.2 in reply to 154208.1
Date: 8/14/2010 4:15:27 PM
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Looks good. But you need to mention that it is free to signup and play as this is a key point.

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154208.3 in reply to 154208.1
Date: 8/14/2010 5:40:36 PM
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I'm a long copy specialist, with some serious blue chips in my client credits. Your header sounds like you're recruiting for the army, your strap last sentence is wayyy too long and heavy but your paragraph proof point summaries are really quite good.

Trouble is, overall, there's far too much text for a landing page and the volume of information is too portal-like. It's more a page you'd see once you've clicked once to chase the scent of information.

Go and do it properly.



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154208.4 in reply to 154208.3
Date: 8/14/2010 7:12:51 PM
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thanks.
nice feed back... will tweak it some more... after paint ball lol...

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154208.5 in reply to 154208.4
Date: 8/14/2010 7:19:45 PM
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Ok ;-)
Remember (or bear in mind) that when you're writing copy that will be translated for Europe, you need to allow 30% extra character count space for the German and Russian translations.
El-M.

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154208.6 in reply to 154208.5
Date: 8/15/2010 2:07:44 AM
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http://a.imageshack.us/img96/8779/buzzerbeaterrevamp2.jpg

I figured jus keep the header simple, and push the USP - Bigger is better (or in this case bestest = P )
It still looks a bit text heavy if you ask me... hmmm.... oh ignore the '.' before '!' typo.

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154208.8 in reply to 154208.7
Date: 8/15/2010 7:13:52 AM
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guys.. I did mention I'm not a graphic designer :) so I don't have any fancy fonts except for the basic fonts that come with my laptop : )

So anyone willing to give it a go to fix the graphic work :P?

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154208.9 in reply to 154208.8
Date: 8/17/2010 7:07:26 AM
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As you said in the opening post, this is probably something more suited to the Suggestions forum so might be best to move it all over there for now :)